Lee Cable Posted April 13, 2006 Report Share Posted April 13, 2006 (edited) Here is a picture of paulolivers advertisment, this is to get him a bit more business.Here is his first idea,Any comments are welcome, i dont mind critocism, as it helps me to improve.From Lee Edited June 8, 2006 by radical rider Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Al_Fel Posted April 13, 2006 Report Share Posted April 13, 2006 quite hard to read with it being black and white text on a black and white picture lol. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lee Cable Posted April 13, 2006 Author Report Share Posted April 13, 2006 quite hard to read with it being black and white text on a black and white picture lol.Ok thanks! Ill have a look at that!I have addressed this issue so it doesnt need repeating! From lee Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Will Arnold Posted April 13, 2006 Report Share Posted April 13, 2006 Ok thanks! Ill have a look at that!I have addressed this issue so it doesnt need repeating! From leehave u addressed the issue? still looks prettey white and black to me Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lee Cable Posted April 13, 2006 Author Report Share Posted April 13, 2006 have u addressed the issue? still looks prettey white and black to me lol ok wait..Sorted..anything else? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Siders77 Posted April 13, 2006 Report Share Posted April 13, 2006 That looks worse IMO, sorry. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
yoyoyo Posted April 13, 2006 Report Share Posted April 13, 2006 Now where the text is it's in a box and you can't really see the picture behind. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lee Cable Posted April 13, 2006 Author Report Share Posted April 13, 2006 ok, this is only first idea's so this doesnt mean it will be THE idea that we put up all over the place, Ill look into the picture/text dilema(sp?) from Lee Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Simon Posted April 13, 2006 Report Share Posted April 13, 2006 You've made it in word, first mistake. You've highlighted the text thinking its a good effect, it really isn't, second mistake. Yellow text on a black and white picture is tacky, it always has, and always will be, third mistake. You've used word, fourth mistake. You've used word. fifth mistake.Personally, i would get a picture editing suite, and maybe look at a different picture. Word is designed for exactly that, words, not designing advertisements.Also get a website done first, then add the website link in their somewhere, then remove half the information to make it a simple advertisement then display the rest of the information on the site. Also saves re-printing more advertisements or re-advertising 'cause you need the website marketed too.The text also looks like a list. If something looks like a list, use a list element (bullet points). Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lee Cable Posted April 13, 2006 Author Report Share Posted April 13, 2006 Thank you, could you recommend a good picture editing sweet? Would Photoshop do?From lee Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Joe_Elding Posted April 13, 2006 Report Share Posted April 13, 2006 I'm gonna ring him at 3 in the morning and see if we really can call him ''anytime'' Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lee Cable Posted April 13, 2006 Author Report Share Posted April 13, 2006 Haha, go for itFrom Lee Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Freddie Posted April 14, 2006 Report Share Posted April 14, 2006 You can't stick that much text on an advert... people don't willingly read adverts remember. If it doesn't look easy to the eye they wont read it. So I recommend you cut down the text and change the colour of the telephone number to make that part stand out more. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CurtisRider Posted April 14, 2006 Report Share Posted April 14, 2006 You can't stick that much text on an advert... people don't willingly read adverts remember. If it doesn't look easy to the eye they wont read it. So I recommend you cut down the text and change the colour of the telephone number to make that part stand out more. not entirely true, seeing as im having to turn down customers now but i agree, it is a little packed, thats my fault, i do need something much simpler and eye catching-well more professional really Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rob_P Posted April 14, 2006 Report Share Posted April 14, 2006 That is.....quite frankly.......awful! haha sorry Na it's alrite I suppose but everything needs changing and re-arranging. Start off with a good background picture that is something that can clearly be seen. Maybe a close up of a bike part would be a good idea. The text really isn't very easy to read, the highlighted look doesn't look good at all. Leave it plain and simple. Less is better as they say, theres too much text really, obviously keep basic details like phone number, (obviously a website would be great,) and a quick summery. I know theres still quite limited detail but it just 'looks' a lot. I'm not to keen on the whole list, centred thing either. If I was you, i'd start again in Photoshop from scratch. Show us any updates P.S . Paul- when are you ever going to make my mate spud (Dan Milton) that promised booster Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tomturd Posted April 14, 2006 Report Share Posted April 14, 2006 I guess you're average customer will be someone with a buckled wheel or something, so doubt they need to know about prototype frames and stuff - as has been said before, cut it down, make it easier to read..ServicesFull ServicesWheel Building/ServicingGearsBrakesMaybe forget the background picture as it seems to be causing all sorts of hassle, put it to the side or something then have black text on white background. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
sexymike Posted April 14, 2006 Report Share Posted April 14, 2006 custom frame? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Greetings Posted April 14, 2006 Report Share Posted April 14, 2006 Far too much information, ads should be clean and simple. You might want to add all that information underneath in small letters just in case anybody's interested. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mat hudson Posted April 18, 2006 Report Share Posted April 18, 2006 pauls wheelbuilds are the best pics to follow, probably tomorow. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mark W Posted April 18, 2006 Report Share Posted April 18, 2006 Pity you didn't get one from when the wheel wouldn't go through the fork "Competitive prices" followed by "Fixed prices" seems a little odd. Does that mean that Paul won't price-match anyone else or something?Not down with the general lay-out of it though, I mean, "All bikes all problems" would suggest he dealt with "All bikes" and "all problems", so you don't necessarily need to clutter the ad up with listing what "All problems" are, if you get me? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Onza Kieron Posted April 18, 2006 Report Share Posted April 18, 2006 I'm gonna ring him at 3 in the morning and see if we really can call him ''anytime''Just what I was thinking. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mat hudson Posted April 20, 2006 Report Share Posted April 20, 2006 (edited) paulbikes wheelbuilds, coming to a place near you love you paul Edited April 20, 2006 by mat hudson Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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