Rich Pearson Posted January 24, 2006 Report Share Posted January 24, 2006 (edited) Eyup,I need you fellas to give me a hand with summat if anyone’s got a few minutes to spare..tv.isg.si linkClick on the above link and download the video titled Artefact First Draft. Its only a small file (10mb) and all the footage has been used before in my videos, but that’s not the point.The point is that the video is a mock advertisement for a TV show about Biketrials. Please don’t get excited, I’m only making an advert, there’s no TV series coming, I wish it were different. Both the Interactive Visual Technologies Channel and Biketrials: A Sport Outside Society are complete fabrications to support this project and are completely fictious. The reason I’ve made it is that its for my AS level media studies project on video production and I need some feedback from real people who know what they are talking about, and anyone who just has an opinion on what they liked about it, what they disliked, how they think it could be made better; I want to hear from anyone and everyone. PLEASE DON’T: just post saying, “It’s Amazing!” or “It’s Shit!” I want to know what’s shit about it so’s I can make it better.If you can help I’d be really appreciative. Thanks Rich Edited January 24, 2006 by karsonlevoret Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dr. Nick Riviera Posted January 24, 2006 Report Share Posted January 24, 2006 brilliant , the only fault i could find was the big chunks of black at the beginning. we have to make the intro to a thriller for our as project i'll get trials in it one way or another Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Siders77 Posted January 24, 2006 Report Share Posted January 24, 2006 Yeah, it's really, really good. But as Charel said the black bits at the start are too long I think. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chicky Posted January 24, 2006 Report Share Posted January 24, 2006 The chunks are goooood You need a new font mate (on the white writing in the begining), something a bit more fancy would be great. Also i'm not too keen on the voice over, it doesn't seen to fit in for an advert.Maybe make the logo at the end for the tv channel a bit more prominent, try using a focal point in the image at the end, have something in the middle that the eye will be drawn to.Otherwise ace vid mate, A++! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Matt_Tupman Posted January 24, 2006 Report Share Posted January 24, 2006 Thats not fair! we have to make a childrens tv programe!Looks good rich just need to clean up the vocals could be my pc but the music seemed to dominate it a bit.I'd try and make my own font, that always looks more profesional and the into needs to be shortened.And the clip of Alex at the start doesn't really link?? I'm not sure on that oneChew on that Rich Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rob_P Posted January 24, 2006 Report Share Posted January 24, 2006 Was good, the idea and editing is top dog but the only real thing that stood out to me was your voice, as much as you may have a gentle, soft voice while making love to whiteboy in that I couldnt really tell what you were saying, seemed like you were a bit...shy Dunno, just maybe try re doing that bit and it's spot on Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rich Pearson Posted January 24, 2006 Author Report Share Posted January 24, 2006 Looks good rich just need to clean up the vocals could be my pc but the music seemed to dominate it a bit.And the clip of Alex at the start doesn't really link?? I'm not sure on that oneYeah was just talking to AndyT about the vocals and it was just really damn hard to record them without getting heaps of backgroud destortion. I'll have to play around with some of the synth levels and the volume to see if I can punch it up a bit. I'm also gonna see what its like with my girlfriend doing the voiceover as she has a slightly higher voice but more dynamic than mine.the clip of Alex I just liked as it was someone alone and (quite literally at the time...) caught out which is what I was trying to get across with the whole 'no manager, no subs' thing. But I see where you're coming from.Was good, the idea and editing is top dog but the only real thing that stood out to me was your voice, as much as you may have a gentle, soft voice while making love to whiteboy in that I couldnt really tell what you were saying, seemed like you were a bit...shy Dunno, just maybe try re doing that bit and it's spot on Thanks Rob. I'll have to get my growl on for when I go over to see Whiteass later. Rich Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Luke Williams! Posted January 24, 2006 Report Share Posted January 24, 2006 yer i really liked it the as people have said before the black bits are abit annoying the voice is very muffled cant hear some of the stuff you are saying and also i would use a diffrent voice not because theres anything wrong with yours but yoru dialect of english just doesnt sound right maybe me just me but meh the rest of it was class! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
011001000110010101110010 Posted January 24, 2006 Report Share Posted January 24, 2006 I like it rich, the quick clips really worked well. Possible re-record the voice clips with more meaning if you know what I mean. More feeling boy! Other than that cool Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
poopipe Posted January 25, 2006 Report Share Posted January 25, 2006 is good just a couple o things thoughfont - something a bit rougher like courier ? - with a filter so it looks typewritten maybe? i didn't have sound but i wasn't getting much sense of impact when people crashed/landed on stuff. maybe zoom in on the impact point a bit like they do when people crash in those police chase programs?? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
STEVE-0 Posted January 26, 2006 Report Share Posted January 26, 2006 Great vid but i think its the same 3 things that everyone doesnt seem to likeThe Font - a little boring although nice and clear maybe could be changed, i really dont think the end slide works at all though.The Long Black gaps - a bit too long, i know its hard to get the right and feel and fit the music but this needs fiddling with...you want to show as many different sides of trials as possible, which are your decision in the endThe Voice over - MAJOR PROBLEM - the voice really needs to be clear and powerful i feel, its ok by the sounds of it although the quality is terrible and i find it really hard to hear everythingThe Voice is key so if you can manage to get that right the video/advert should be Mint!Hope I've helped, good luck...Steve Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dallas Posted January 26, 2006 Report Share Posted January 26, 2006 (edited) Very nice!! Same things, voice is hard to distinguish/long black outsFew things I might add/change:- I find slow motion is really nice when you are trying to accentuate something, maybe some of the big moves could be done in slow motion- "is unrelenting" goes by really quickly and it would be cool if the music had a big punch as soon as it fades out, that point in the video seems sort of climactic to me...Thanks, great video Edited January 26, 2006 by Dallas Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
rathergoodpie Posted January 26, 2006 Report Share Posted January 26, 2006 (edited) is good just a couple o things thoughfont - something a bit rougher like courier ? - with a filter so it looks typewritten maybe? i didn't have sound but i wasn't getting much sense of impact when people crashed/landed on stuff. maybe zoom in on the impact point a bit like they do when people crash in those police chase programs??NOOOOO! not courier. please. Its such a f**king cliche font Edited January 26, 2006 by rathergoodpie Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Alan Posted January 28, 2006 Report Share Posted January 28, 2006 Cleverer?? is that a word (It might be it just sounds/looks weird) "He/It is more clever than you"? and apart from what has already been said it a good video Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Matt_Tupman Posted January 31, 2006 Report Share Posted January 31, 2006 You going to post up an updated version Rich?? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rich Pearson Posted January 31, 2006 Author Report Share Posted January 31, 2006 I'm gonna run it by my Media class and get some feedback from them before I re-do it, then I'll put up the updated version for more scrutiny from you lot. Thanks for all your help guys. Rich Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lunja Posted February 3, 2006 Report Share Posted February 3, 2006 Hey- just some quick input-If you do change the font, try not to use a serif font, since the serifs themselves tend to wash out on TV sets. Sans is the way to go Also, remember that ads tend not to describe the actual product, but rather the feeling that the user will get from owning it. Hence why car ads never say "It's got a 1.6L engine which'll do 40+mpg", but instead have some bloke ragging it round a mountain So you could possibly add some imagery of competition, ie. someone hitting a punchbag, to add to the idea of an unrelenting opponent.I'm not saying you should change anything, rather suggesting alternatives if you wanted to use them.Good work chap Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
oakley Posted February 3, 2006 Report Share Posted February 3, 2006 made your voice more: distinctivelouderstrongermore powerfulyou know what i mean? make it stand out more rather than your just there reading off a sheet ( which i know you probably are!)joE!other than that i liked itp.s, and the end, make the t.v symbol more central maybe, make it stand out, people need to know what channel it's on. even if the volumes down, get me? i liked it alot though! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RR_Trials Posted February 3, 2006 Report Share Posted February 3, 2006 Amazing... I love the way you said "And he" then waited for a while to build up suspense whilst flashing clips across the screen. Truly amazing peace of work! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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