Post Your Personal Statment

[Simpson]

Well our schools final deadline for handing in was today i hadn't finished it so literally just e-mailed it across to my tutor. Quite a lot of making the most of stuff but here we go;

I have always been a highly driven, determined, hard working individual. With a fundamental interest in core mathematics, I love the fact that there are no ambiguities and that there is always a logical progression towards the right answer. As my school was a maths and computering college they were always keen to push us forwards. My teachers saw my enthusiasm and I sat AS C1 mathematics at the end of year 11.

Recently the mathematics side of my business studies has also flourished, being able to use business models to make forecasts which could decide the movements of the business in the future is really enjoyable. I have always been an academic and I think that a degree in business mathematics is the best choice for me and could greatly aid me in future career plans. I also study psychology, which I have enjoyed and gives me a rounded insight into the social sciences.

I believe that I have many traits which make me a good candidate. I am a strong leader, I represented my form in senior school as house captain throughout my 5 years in senior school and during this time we had many successes. We won the rugby inter-form tournament 5 times in a row and house football 3 times. These winnings were partly due to my enthusiasm to co-ordinate, lead and organise the strongest possible team. I also captained Benfleet Youth Football for 4 of the 10 years I played at the club. We achieved many great feats including reaching the finals stage of the Southend District Cup where we played at Southend United’s stadium Roots Hall. I represented my school in Rugby as part of the team that won the Essex Cup 5 times in a row, showing how I thrive on success and am a dedicated team player.

My determination is shown in my love of bike trials which is a discipline which relies heavily on technique and balancing, it is a very demanding sport, just to learn the basics takes over a year. I have now been riding for over 4 years and get a great sense of achievement when I watch videos I made years ago and compare them to my ability now. I also enjoy helping new riders with their technique and confidence. I am often referred to as the, “London organiser” as I plan, organise and co-ordinate group rides in and around the London area every 6 weeks. Communication and forward planning are essential as many riders aren’t familiar with the London area. Over 50 people attend which have all been great successes, we have many spectators and a great feeling of community and team spirit.

I have always been very independent. In my free time I have managed school work alongside part time employment since I was 14. I delivered a free paper once a week for 2 years. It was good for me to work hard from a young age as it gave me enough money to keep biking and a sense of achievement and independence from my family. I brought a motorbike at 16 with my savings and since then have passed both my full motorbike and car tests which shows my enthusiasm for independence and travel.

At 16 I started working at Sainsbury’s as a customer services assistant. I enjoy working there, the interaction with customers is interesting and the job has constant demands which keep me guessing and on my toes. I have earned a lot of trust from my colleagues at Sainsbury’s which is really satisfying. I have been charge of doing all the cashing up of till’s at the end of the day unsupervised which shows their confidence in me. I have been trusted to take money in and out of the safe at the branch which was a great responsibility. I was awarded a shining star for exceptional performance with my customer service skills which was a great honour being individually selected from over 120 checkout staff. I also do some supervisory roles as I am respected enough by my co-workers.

After graduation I would like to work in finance and business, the business cycle really interests me especially considering the current economic climate. I always watch the news and take a great interest in current economic events.

Its already the full 4k character allowance and really want to put something with a bit more punch at the end...... think its too like... whey i do sports lol

[Papa Manual]

Nice statement, well written. I'd get some work experience in finance before going through with it. It's a little.....mundane.

[Simpson]

Nice statement, well written. I'd get some work experience in finance before going through with it. It's a little.....mundane.

Oh yea shit i have work exp. lined up over next summer actually that wouldn't be a bad thing if i could squeeze that in....

[Papa Manual]

I'd change "and business, the business " to "and business as the business" although I'm only skimming because I'm still at work.

I never did a personal statement because I suck.

EDIT: and a comma after especially at the end.

Double EDIT: Ignore me actually as I'm reading it backwards and I'm an asshole when it comes to proof-reading hehe.

[Joe_Elding]

yh

Edited September 30, 2008 by Joe_Elding

[Simpson]

pretty good bruuddaaa, ive stolen 'ambiguities'. mines only a paragraph long though so far. what unis you going for?

Hahaha i stole that from someone who was doing his oxbridge applications lol

urm no idea... Bristol and Leistershire.... not too sure... you?

[Dr. Nick Riviera]

You do realise they cross-reference personal statements don't you?

[Fishy]

Oh shit, they've used the same word as thousands of other students, they must be all cheating scum.

[Rumplestiltskin]

When you refer to your football results, I'd replace "many great feats" with something like "considerable success". "Many great feats" sounds a little verbose compared to the rest of the smart, functional, but low key text. In other words, it sticks out like a sore thumb and interrupts the flow of the writing.

Edited September 24, 2008 by Rumplestiltskin

[Fixed Pants™]

Hi, i'm Glen, and i'm a repeat offender.

[Max Quinn]

Computering Computing

[Barbara Logan-Price]

Hi, i'm Glen, and i'm a repeat offender.

LOL

[Danny]

I just found mine and read it. I sounded like such a tard hah.