Hey mate, The start is reallg good and creative. Although i think you should cut the song there as it was, and put somthing a little more mellow and chilling in. Also the video is shaping up to be "just" a trials video if you get me. I think you need to be more creative in what your doing. Also what programme you editing it in? I would add more effects and creative riding to be honest. Get some nice lines in there to attract the viewers attention. Whens the deadline?